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Old 05-19-2008, 09:58 PM
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I couldn't access your first blog (404 error), but for the 2nd one I've gotta say it's pretty good. You use a very conversational tone, which is something I like to use as well. I feel like I'm in the room with you rather than you talking AT me. That's important and something many Webmasters fail to master and I think it's particularly important with an entertainment site.

One thing I noticed on one of your archive pages is that you start a lot of sentences with "He". You might want to watch that as it gets redundant. Just remember to swap that out that word with Michael so it flows better. You do that for the most part but one article I was reading (sorry can't remember which one now) I noticed some redundancies.

Good job!
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